2009年8月2日 星期日
Water-shortage
There are no rain very very long time, we will probably face a problem of water-shortage. Taiwan has a water-shortage in summer, but summer is a season that we use most of water in a year. Therefore, to use water wisely is a part of our vital tasks in our lives. To complete the task, we have to turn off the faucet after using it. We also have to use water machines economically and wisely because that water resource will be a problem in future. Remember water is one of the limited resources, and we should use it with respect.
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Hello there,
It's nice to see that you've started dealing with "topics."
The following are the points you have to pay heed to in your future writing:
1. "rain" is an uncountable noun, so you should write: "There is no rain...." However, since you meant to say a condition for a period of time, you have to use the perfect tense, and thus the first sentence should be: "There has been no rain for a very very long time..."
2. "water-shortage" is also uncountable, so you can just write it down without any article, or add some noun to express additional details, such as "the problem of water-shortage," "the predicament of water-shortage," and "the crisis of water-shortage."
3. About the relative clause. Since relative clauses come from the combination of two sentences, you have to pay attention not to forget the propositions in the original sentences. Take your sentence for example, "summer is a season that we use most (of) water in a year" misses a proposition "in." Why? The original two sentences are: "Summer is a season." and "We use most water in summer in a year." Thus the relative clause should be: "Summer is a season which/that we use most water in in a year." That's right, there are two INs. Or, you can put the former "in" in front of the relative "which," and make this sentence: "Summer is a season in which we use most water in a year." Note that in this case, the relative CANNOT be changed to "that."
4. In the sentence "We also have to use water machines economically and wisely because...," there should be no "that" after "because," or you can use "in that" to express "because."
Next time you can try to add some more details and express more of your ideas. Keep it up!
Terence
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