Today we take a Geography class, it is boring. I almost sleep for all of the course. Maybe it is a wrong choice, but I really think that class is not affection enough to me. Perhaps I will get some knowledge a little, but I think I can do something that is good for me on this class.
Daniel Chen 2009/7/27
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Hi Daniel,
Thank you for your efforts; keep it up!
The following are some points for you to pay attention to:
1. When you describe things that have happened, you should use "past tense." Thus the opening sentence should be: "Today we took a Geography class...."
2. There must be a conjunction to link two sentences, or you can just use a period to separate the two sentences. Accordingly, you should write: "Today we took a Geography class, and it was boring." or "Today we took a Geography class. It was boring."
3. In "[T]hat class is not affection enough to me," "affection" should be replaced by some "adjective" such as attractive, interesting, fascinating, since what is being modified is a "noun" (class).
4. Choose one between "some" and "a little" in your "Perhaps I will get...," because the two adjectives suggest the same idea.
5. Well, this is just my wondering: What do you plan to do on the class?
Terence
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